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Some people think that money is the best gift to give to young people while others think other types of gifts are better for young people.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 fund the best
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 or another type of
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 are better for young
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? It is a difficult question but every
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 choose a
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 from their style. I agree with it, who suggests other
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. Many
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money
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 is the best
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 for young
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 because
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 think that they already have everything which is toys, dresses, books and others.
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, they think
money
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 is the best
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 for their friend or relatives.
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 who do not choose a
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, I am in agreement with those who believe that actual
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 are better than
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.I prefer to give presents to my friends and relatives because we can remember good and happy memories with these
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. If we give
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 as a
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, it only maybe financial aid for the present receiver
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. In conclusion,
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 believe that financial
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 may be ideal and popular
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 among youngers, I do not agree with it because actual
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 show memories and happy times in their life. It is clearly important to consider the needs and interests of young
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