Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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The publicity of commodities is a new trend in

current

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market, that encourages

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the public

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to purchase

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item that they generally do not require while some

people

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believe that branding

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us a different perspective

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could change our lives. In

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essay, I agree with both

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viewpoints as they are essential these days. On one hand, marketing plays with the mind of a consumer. An

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will be designed in a manner to attract customers to purchase

products

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as groceries,

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stationery

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stationary

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items, home utilities and many more.

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, these commodities usually have discounts or giveaway gift items that would keep the consumer engaged with the services.

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facilites

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facilities

like free home deliveries and return policies

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even

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easier to buy

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goods that are not needed.

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, on

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there are many items listed down but

people

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tend to buy

products

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that

looks

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cheaper and discounted

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continious

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continuous

advertise

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advertising

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products

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are displayed.

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, advertisements that are shown over and again indicates that the

products

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they want to showcase

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somehow in a different manner than

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their

compititors

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competitors

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to each new product, there are improved versions of them.

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, there is always a factor where we experiment

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weather

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the product is reliable for our personal use or not. In conclusion, I would like to say that in the near

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future

people

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will tend to depend on the branding of their

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to show how the new product varies from the older one and some

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would

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fall into the marking traps and buy

products

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that they rarely use but has purchased because that they at

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it is necessary for them.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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encourage
persuade
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unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
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benefits
innovations
raise awareness
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enrich
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