Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

The publicity of commodities is a new trend in
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market, that encourages
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the public
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to purchase
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item that they generally do not require while some
people
believe that branding
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us a different perspective
which
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could change our lives. In
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essay, I agree with both
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viewpoints as they are essential these days. On one hand, marketing plays with the mind of a consumer. An
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will be designed in a manner to attract customers to purchase
products
such
as groceries,
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stationary
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stationery
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items, home utilities and many more.
However
, these commodities usually have discounts or giveaway gift items that would keep the consumer engaged with the services.
Nevertheless
,
facilites
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facilities
like free home deliveries and return policies
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it
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more
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easier to buy
such
goods that are not needed.
For instance
, on
Amazon
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there are many items listed down but
people
tend to buy
products
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cheaper and discounted
also
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continuous
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of
products
are displayed.
On the other hand
, advertisements that are shown over and again indicates that the
products
they want to showcase
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somehow in a different manner than
thier
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their
compititors
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competitors
.
In addition
to each new product, there are improved versions of them.
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weather
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the product is reliable for our personal use or not. In conclusion, I would like to say that in the near
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future
people
will tend to depend on the branding of their
products
to show how the new product varies from the older one and some
people
would
also
fall into the marking traps and buy
products
that they rarely use but has purchased because that they at
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it is necessary for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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