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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#people #advertisements #products #lives
The publicity of commodities is a new trend in
current
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 market, that encourages
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the public
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 to purchase
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item that they generally do not require while some
people
 believe that branding
show
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 us a different perspective
which
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 could change our lives. In
this
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viewpoints as they are essential these days. On one hand, marketing plays with the mind of a consumer. An
advertise
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 will be designed in a manner to attract customers to purchase
products
such
 as groceries,
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stationery
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stationary
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stationery
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 items, home utilities and many more.
However
, these commodities usually have discounts or giveaway gift items that would keep the consumer engaged with the services.
Nevertheless
,
facilites
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facilities
 like free home deliveries and return policies
makes
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 it
even
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more
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easier to buy
such
 goods that are not needed.
For instance
, on
Amazon
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,Amazon
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 there are many items listed down but
people
 tend to buy
products
 that
looks
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 cheaper and discounted
also
continious
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continuous
advertise
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 of
products
 are displayed.
On the other hand
, advertisements that are shown over and again indicates that the
products
 they want to showcase
is
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 somehow in a different manner than
thier
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their
compititors
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competitors
.
In addition
 to each new product, there are improved versions of them.
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 to
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, there is always a factor where we experiment
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weather
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whether
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 the product is reliable for our personal use or not. In conclusion, I would like to say that in the near
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future
people
 will tend to depend on the branding of their
products
 to show how the new product varies from the older one and some
people
 would
also
 fall into the marking traps and buy
products
 that they rarely use but has purchased because that they at
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 it is necessary for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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