Many Offenders commit more crime after serving the first punishments. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problems.

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If you are convicted for any
crime
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you have to serve
inprisonment
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imprisonment
in jail. It is often seen that individuals after serving their
first
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jail
becames
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becomes
became
more offensive and tend to
commite
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commit
more serious
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crime
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crimes
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. In
this
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essay, I will discuss the reasons for
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aforesaid
problems and
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try to provide suitable measures to avoid
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incidents.
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, it is very important to analyse the root cause of the problem. To find out the exact cause for becoming
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history-sheeter
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history
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a history
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sheeter
instead
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of doing better after serving
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first
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sentence
, we have to focus on the events/things
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happens
with
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first timers
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. It is seen that many times offender comes in contact with bad or serious criminal and they tend to change their
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perspective
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prospective
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towards
the
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apply
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society.
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brainwashing
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brain washing
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occurs when any new prisoner get exposed
with
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the ideas of
serious
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the serious
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offender.
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, despite
of
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thinking about the
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consequences
of being in jail, offenders thinks that what worse could happen.
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also
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think
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that he can handle any type of punishment. To avoid
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incident
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incidents
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, police can take several steps. Officials can
bifurgate
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bifurcate
the criminals depending on their
crime
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and lock them according to the severity of their
offenses
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offences
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. Police can implement
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rewards
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, based on good behaviour.
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to
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, to set an example of
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citizen, officials can show them movies with good
messege
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message
messages
. In conclusion, it is obvious that
commiting
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committing
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crime
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a crime
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is
bad
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a bad
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thing and it should never be done by anyone. With joint
afforts
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efforts
of public and
police
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,police
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we can
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definitely
overcome the problem of conversion of firstime offender to
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