Many Offenders commit more crime after serving the first punishments. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problems.

If you are convicted for any
crime
you have to serve
inprisonment
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imprisonment
in jail. It is often seen that individuals after serving their
first
jail
becames
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becomes
became
more offensive and tend to
commite
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commit
more serious
crime
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. In
this
essay, I will discuss the reasons for
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aforesaid
problems and
also
try to provide suitable measures to avoid
such
incidents.
Firstly
, it is very important to analyse the root cause of the problem. To find out the exact cause for becoming
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history-sheeter
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history
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sheeter
instead
of doing better after serving
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sentence
, we have to focus on the events/things
heppens
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happens
with
first timers
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. It is seen that many times offender comes in contact with bad or serious criminal and they tend to change their
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perspective
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prospective
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towards
the
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society.
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brain washing
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occurs when any new prisoner get exposed
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the ideas of
serious
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offender.
Moreover
, despite
of
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thinking about the
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consequences
of being in jail, offenders thinks that what worse could happen.
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also
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that he can handle any type of punishment. To avoid
such
incident
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, police can take several steps. Officials can
bifurgate
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bifurcate
the criminals depending on their
crime
and lock them according to the severity of their
offenses
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. Police can implement
reward
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, based on good behaviour.
Further
to
this
, to set an example of
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citizen, officials can show them movies with good
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message
messages
. In conclusion, it is obvious that
commiting
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committing
crime
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is
bad
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thing and it should never be done by anyone. With joint
afforts
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efforts
of public and
police
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we can
definately
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definitely
overcome the problem of conversion of firstime offender to
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