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Band 5

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #railways #roads
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It is often argued that
,
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 it is vital to choose a method for transportation that logically has more advantages in different terms. I am certain that if a country
invest
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amount
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the amount
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 of its budget
on
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 making railways, that country improves. In the status quo, all
people
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 need is to save their
money
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 from things
which
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 can be neglected. Private transportation can be eradicated easily and
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 it is public transport
such
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 as railways that can
people
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 use to manage their budget for saving more
money
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. If public transports grow,
people
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 will not pay a lot of
money
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 for fossil fuels.
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, in European countries due to not being rich in oil, inhabitants ought to put a lot of
money
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 on fuels.
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, by using
railway
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 not only do
people
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 spend their
money
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 on other things but
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 it prevents from traffic. On the other
hands
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, poor countries like some considerable number of societies in Africa are not able to find a kind of source to afford the
money
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 which is needed. In
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way
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 authorities put more pressure on taking taxes from poor
people
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 for filling their exchequer. So
this
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 can be counted as one of the major causes
for
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 poverty in
third
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 world countries. Taking everything
to
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into consideration, I strongly believe that, putting
money
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, wealth and time
on
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 making railways and HDR
known
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 as high-speed rail can bring profit to the country and its benefits outweigh its drawbacks.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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