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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #railways #roads
It is often argued that
,
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 it is vital to choose a method for transportation that logically has more advantages in different terms. I am certain that if a country
invest
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amount
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the amount
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 of its budget
on
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 making railways, that country improves. In the status quo, all
people
 need is to save their
money
 from things
which
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 can be neglected. Private transportation can be eradicated easily and
instead
 it is public transport
such
 as railways that can
people
 use to manage their budget for saving more
money
. If public transports grow,
people
 will not pay a lot of
money
 for fossil fuels.
Moreover
, in European countries due to not being rich in oil, inhabitants ought to put a lot of
money
 on fuels.
However
, by using
railway
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 not only do
people
 spend their
money
 on other things but
also
 it prevents from traffic. On the other
hands
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, poor countries like some considerable number of societies in Africa are not able to find a kind of source to afford the
money
 which is needed. In
this
way
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 authorities put more pressure on taking taxes from poor
people
 for filling their exchequer. So
this
 can be counted as one of the major causes
for
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 poverty in
third
 world countries. Taking everything
to
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into consideration, I strongly believe that, putting
money
, wealth and time
on
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 making railways and HDR
known
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 as high-speed rail can bring profit to the country and its benefits outweigh its drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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