Some people think that male leaders always lead us to violence and conflict, but female leaders are better than male leaders to gives the better governed and more peaceful society. Do you agree or disagree?

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is the big statement in

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there are two contrasting views in which the section of

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deems that due to

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increased rapidly whereas

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women

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have more leadership qualities and

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to manage

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in a polite way. I partially agree with the given statement as females become more polite and sincere as compared to males to take

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are good to take

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and due to their maturity level they manage the

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in a good manner.

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politics is just like a thing where only men can do

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diversity or

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stronger physically and mentally while girls are only capable to do household jobs.

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power of sensibility to solve hard problems in a logical way whereas

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always use their physical intentions to solve the things which will

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. Chiefly, ladies are more knowledgeable and educated than

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and they always believe in

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things and have

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skills to prove everything in s logical way. In my profound opinion, males and females are

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as they both have their own ideas and views to deal with the situation but according to me if in politics they both will work together which will be helpful in future to elevate the chances of

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against each other and it will

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to reduce the chances of difference in boys and girls in upcoming

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as there will be no diverse nature between them . It will be beneficial to improve the economic status of the city as everyone will work together.

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Some people think that male leaders always lead us to violence and conflict, but female leaders are better than male leaders to gives the better governed and more peaceful society. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the future, all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantagse?

In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports, What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?