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Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries , shopbando public transport . To What Extent doagreeord is agree w i t h t h i s s t a t e o r d i s a g r e e w i t h t h i s s t a t e m e n t ?

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Opinions are divided on whether
phones
 should be strictly prohibited in public locations
such
 as libraries,hospitals and on public transport.I believe that
such
 a ban would prove problematic and that there are conferred benefits from allowing
people
 to
use
phones
 in these settings. Granted, one might argue that
phones
 should not be allowed to
use
 in these spaces because the
use
 of
this
 device might distract other
people
.A good example is that the sound of someone talking on the
phone
 or the notifications can interrupt
people
 who study in the library.
However
,
this
 problem would be solved without banning the
use
 of
phone
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 completely in these areas. The
straight forward
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 solution would be to ask
people
 to turn off their
phone
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. To add
futher
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further
 credence , I note that it is difficult to ban the
use
 of
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the phone
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phone
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 in the public.
This
 is because it would require an
unimaginaly
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unimaginable
unimaginably
 amount of
an
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power to make it work: it would be unthinkable to have a police officer on each bus
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journey
 or in each shop or
libraries
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.Perhaps, the most
frequantly
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frequently
 cited reason
forr
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for
 using
phones
 in public is that
phone
 users can contact their friends or family members
on
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emergency
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an emergency
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case
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. In conclusion, the
use
 of
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phone
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 can not be banned in public areas.
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