In many countries smoking in now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree?

Smoking is illegal in public places or other public areas in many countries. In the paragraphs below, two
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points will be discussed its cons and pros. In my opinion, smoking is not used
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in our life because
this
is a very bad thing and
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damage us. Indeed, smoking is illegal in main areas especially, main parks, government, workplaces, public transport and other the same places.
Government's
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haws are very important because if we don't these haws, we overlive some punishments.
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, we always don't smoke, merely
this
is a harmful thing and it takes
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times
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of our lives. Some peoples smoke anywhere because they habit it. If they drink some medicines for
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, they are getting rid of smoking. One day, I have seen one person who smoking and I gave advice him
this
is a very bad thing, I said him that smoking is a bad aspect
is
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your life,
then
that humans try to get rid of
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and he always drank some medicines and another type of healing products. He
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smoked
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ever since and I am very happy with
this
.
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, never exhaust especially in public community indeed,
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thing is others heart. In conclusion, smoking is a very bad thing in our
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and if people do not exhaust they are very strong and very healthy.
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