You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a regular reader of your
magazine
. I would like to express my concern regarding some incorrect information in your recent publication which is on 10th March. In
this
, the writer described that traditional local food restaurants and high-class luxury hotels are not available in the town of Yangon. As a local citizen of Yangon, I would like to point out that there are plenty of restaurants available local authentic traditional foods
such
as mohinga, noodles with creamy coconut soup along the road of the city centre.
Moreover
, both beautiful classic and modern decorated hotels can be seen near the coastal road of Yangon. it is not acceptable and surprised that
this
kind of misinformation is stated in
such
a popular international travel
magazine
. Your
magazine
is one of well-known travel
journal
Fix the agreement mistake
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so that it should not be simply published for
such
crucial facts. Most travellers and tourists trust your journal and use it as a reliable source of information. As far as I am concerned, the editor should check all the facts in the
magazine
are true and accurate with the real situations before it was published. I would like to see amended information and
also
, an apology remark about
this
in your
next
publication. I hope you would do the necessary action upon my request. Kind regards, Yan
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