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Some countries have spent a large amount of money on bicycles. Why has this happened? Is it the best way to solve traffic problems?

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Nowadays, there are some countries that have invested a huge amount of their budget to manufacture
bicycles
. Since cycling is an efficient and innocuous way of travelling , the environment gets significant benefit via
this
. In
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 I will discuss causes and give my own approach to
this
 issue. There are several reasons why authorities mainly have focused on
bicycles
.
First
 and foremost, it has no negative impacts on the environment.We know that today's hottest problem is air pollution, each country located in different spots of the world suffers from
this
 and cars are mainly blamed for air pollution. So the government should implement any remedy in order to decline contamination. I consider that introduction of
bicycles
 by numerous societies is an ideal fit as one of the solutions.
For example
, as
bicycles
 do not require any kind of fuel for their movement, various toxic gases ,fumes , especially, greenhouse gases cannot be sent out to the atmosphere.
Therefore
, the quality of air will commence
increasing
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. Another important reason in
this
 regard is the health benefits of regular cycling. The majority of people navigate their cars for commuting workplaces and are stuck behind a desk without any action.
This
 repetitive daily routine increases obesity and physical inactivity among people. In order to prevent unhealthiness, some countries have spent more on producing
bicycles
.
On the other hand
,
bicycles
 make it easier to commute through congested areas.
For example
, since they are tiny and require a small space,
bicycles
 do not create traffic jams. So cycling gives an opportunity to save people's valuable time. In conclusion, I believe that every government should perpetuate investing in
bicycles
 and
also
 encourage individuals to utilize more and more.
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