Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information,such as their hobbies and interests,and whether they are married or single.some people say that this information may be relevant and useful.others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write atleast 250 words.

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inquires the
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related to their hobbies and interests and about their personal life whether they are married or single.Some people
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technology related to the
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personal
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while applying for a
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statement is right,sharing
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will helps in many ways,
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if your company is planning for you to have a holiday trip along with your family so if they have access to your personal information it will be helpful for them to make a wise decision.
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that they
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many recruiters
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make
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's personal
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was newly married and he tells it to the
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than he suddenly take a decision by assuming that may be
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person should not give proper time to
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,he must have to give time to his partner so he will prefer unmarried person
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.Whie the selwction must be on the basis of
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's ability In my opinion,there must be another sector who gathers information from the
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of
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who is taking interview.The
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should ask about the interest,knowledge related to the
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's requirement.So it will be beneficial for both tge
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and the
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