Human activities over the period of time have increased global warming. What are the primary causes? What solutions can you suggest?

In
this
modern scenario,the environmental problems
caused
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by
negligence
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the negligence
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of humans participation in all activities
such
as using more vehicles,extinction of
animals
and plants.
this
essay would analyse a few causes of
this
phenomenon and suggests some ways to ameliorate
this
situation. To embark on,our ecosystem is confronted with
a more critical subjects
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more critical subjects
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such
as global warming due to the
relase
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release
of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere by cars and factories.
consequently
,burning fossil fuel
affecting
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the ozone layer which shields the earth from the sun's rays.
as a result
,
the layers depletion
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the depletion of the layer
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has adverse
implication
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implications
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on both plants and
animals
as well as human beings.
moreover
,
incidence
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the incidence
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of skin cancer has risen because of decreasing protection from the sun radiation.
furthermore
,the main significant factor of global warming is deforestation.nowadays,many individuals are cutting trees for their habitat purposes,
then
it will results in the extinction of many
animals
and plants because tress are very imperative to us in terms of protecting from the
extreme
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bad weather as well as providing food.
for instance
,according to the forest department,
animals
and trees have been deteriorating day by day as human activities
involved
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in
the
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trimming forests for constructing new buildings. On another hand,some remedial measures can be taken
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into
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in to
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reduce
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reducing
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the problems.
firstly
,everyone should be aware of the importance of
environment
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the environment
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,
therefore
people should be encouraged to commute by public transport
instead
of private vehicles,
thus
in order to follow
this
rule, we can reduce difficulties but not completely.
for example
,these days,many individuals have
a transport facilities
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transport facilities
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in terms of cars and bikes,
therefore
they should be encouraged to use public
transports
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transport
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such
as buses and trains,so in
this
way,we can reduce the pollution from
vechiles
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vehicles
.
secondly
,the government put a campaign like green campaign,so in
this
program
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authorities take responsibility to plant trees by the hand of every citizen. To conclude,environmental issues mostly impact
greenary
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greenery
and human beings in terms of pollution from
vechiles
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vehicles
and deforestation,so I believe that we should redouble our attention on preventing the destructing of the environment.
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