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Research shows that global warming is caused by human activity. What are the possible effects of climate change and what can governments and individuals do to reduce these?

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Nowadays, global warming is one of the major issues that all of the
world
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concerned
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 about.
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, research shows human activity leads to global heating.
This
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 essay will
shows
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 some possible effects of climate change and ways of reducing
these problem
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this problem
these problems
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 for
government
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the government
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 and
people
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. In recent years, there are lots of climate change signs that clearly shows global warming and impacts on the planet
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,
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 rising minimum and maximum temperature.
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, in the north and south pole
ice bergs
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icebergs
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 are melting and it changes sea levels so,
people
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 cannot cope with new environment or weather elements and harm
they
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 life. that ranges from, beach
people
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 life so they should move to other areas.
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, jungles are fired due to, climate change. It hurts the wildlife and animals can die. The example can be seen the Australian jungles had fired and many animals died.
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, these changes damaged everything in the world and
is
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 the major reason
of
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 the drought, floods and famine.
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,
people
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 can reduce
the
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global warming as individuals.
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 as, saving energy at home. It means
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use
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 less electricity and heating or cooling
powers
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.
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,
instead
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 of heaters they can wear more layers or
hanging
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 out the clothes to dry
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 of using a dryer. And it is advisable
people
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 tend to walk, cycle or use public transport rather private vehicle. So, it decreases greenhouse gas
emission
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emissions
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In
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other
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the other
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 side, authorities can boycott products that harm the environment
such
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,
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 palm oil,
single use
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single-use
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 plastics and soaps which leads to deforestation. To conclude, global warming
that
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caused by human activity has damaged impact but it is possible to reduce and control that as individuals or governments.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • human activity
  • climate change
  • rising sea levels
  • natural disasters
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • weather patterns
  • agriculture
  • food shortages
  • respiratory issues
  • heat strokes
  • spread of diseases
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • carbon footprint
  • legislation
  • public awareness
  • individual responsibility
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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