Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a goo measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not

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In our modern world, making
money
is more important than ever so we are often titled to our luxury savings. In
this
essay, I will outline why
money
shouldn't reflect the rate of
success
and
also
explain why
success
can be measured by qualification sometimes but mostly there is no simple way to do so.
First
of all, I am completely against to common idea that greater incomes mean greater achievements in life.
Although
this
such
a view may be sometimes true, generally, people ignore some ethical principles and give up the quality in order to make much more
money
. Thanks to capitalism, people see now it is perfectly normal to misguide their customers or use as few or unqualified materials as possible if they will make greater profits. Consideration the
money
as an index for
success
is dangerous because it puts the integrity of all aspects of our lives at risk. In order to measure
success
, we need to identify it
first
. When do we call a person successful or to whom? In my point of view, these questions are hard to answer. Maybe, we can use some qualification markers for some occupations.
However
, how can we measure
success
in human relationships , in academies or in art? Amadeus Mozart,
for instance
, suffered from poverty when he was alive. His composes' worth was understood by people only after his death.
Likewise
, the invention of penicillin has saved and is still saving millions of lives.
However
, Alexander Fleming was not a rich man according to my knowledge. After all, the perception of
success
is in a state of flux. In conclusion,
Although
there must be some criteria to inspect the
success
rates of some occupations,
money
shouldn't be one of them. Personally, I feel that some successes are worthless.
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