Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievement, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The allure and possession closely attach to celebrities rather than their accomplishment

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these days.

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phenomenon set a warning to adolescents. Even though there are potential benefits coupled with adverse effects to

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development. In my opinion, I strongly agree due to some

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which are discussed in

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essay. On the one hand,

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is a positive situation for many

reasons

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, two of which are motivations to become richer and achievement without

efforts

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, fortunes appeal to people to satisfy a desire

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wealth, which stimulate people to make a great effort in their work and livelihood to reach their goal.

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inspiration enables them to be more successful and supply all their demands. Another positive aspect of

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is that the emergence of viral media can be a shortcut to

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more well-known, in

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that they are just famous for their external, their beautiful bodies and fancy styles.

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, things succeeding without attempt or talent can not be long-lasting which means that it easily leads them to fail because they can not do anything

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singing, acting,

modeling

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,.....

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, they do not have a stable income and a decent job.

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trend

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has several drawbacks because of two main

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, those can range from imitating their dramatic career's path to putting a low value on their field. Chief among these

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properties are the driving force behind teenager's

aspiration

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, they want to live in the lap of luxury, own

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and spend a great deal of money on

name brand

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products.

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, they easily follow the tracks of their idols by using pervasive scandals to be more renowned and offered many endorsed contracts,

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, they receive an enormous amount of money by their bad reputation.

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, dramas or nasty

rumors

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directly affect

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celebrities' backgrounds and the field they are working in.

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, many people will adopt a negative attitude to

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career or isolate

them

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in the real life. In conclusion,

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believe that richness without achievement does offer certain benefits, it generally does more harm than good. It is understandable why some may disagree but I strongly agree

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such

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a view given the aforementioned

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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375 words

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Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievement, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

More and more children are becoming obese. What are the causes of this and what are the effects?

In many countries, owning a home rather than renting one is deeply valued. This cultural inclination towards homeownership can be attributed to several key factors.

Some university students want to learn about other sujects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this.