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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pictures depict the transformation of Grange
Park
, a public
park
 which
first
 opened in 1920, in over a decade, from 1920 to
present
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the present
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. Overall, the
park
 has been upgraded with different facilities to keep up with the trend, while located
as
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in
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 the same area, surrounded by Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street.
First
, it is obvious that the fountain
that
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apply
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situated
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is situated
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 in the middle of the
park
 is now where a bigger rose
garden
located
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is located
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in
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, fully surrounded by seats. To the west of the rose
garden
,
stage
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a stage
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 for musicians in 1920 was cleared to make way for the amphitheatre for concerts now.
Furthermore
, the rose
garden
that
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located at the
north-west
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northwest
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 of the map remains there. On the top right corner of the map, there is now a children’s play area which is constructed on the original site of
pond
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the pond
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 for water plants. The adjacent rose
garden
 is replaced by a café.
Furthermore
, an underground car
park
 was built to make it more convenient for visitors and the entrance of it is located right
next
 to the water feature, which was where the glasshouse
located
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was located
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in
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back in 1920.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Amphitheater
  • Landscaping
  • Recreational facilities
  • Grassy areas
  • Flowerbeds
  • Pathways
  • Seating areas
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  • Children’s play area
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental impact
  • Social impact
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