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Many people believe that it's better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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Most people feel that it is a better choice to
study
 something with
group
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a group
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 than learning alone . In
this
 modern era, especially nowadays most parents teach their child individually at education because it is believed that
this
 tendency will be more effective . The primary reason is that being alone in the
study
 class and other students can not interrupt
learner
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learners
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,
teacher
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the teacher
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 pays his whole attention to only
one
 pupil and
also
 there will be more time to discuss the theme or to
study
 hard. To illustrate
this
, I have
one
 friend who goes
extra
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 individual lessons. He learnt more things , got lots of knowledge in a short period and of course his studying alone was his achievement .
On the other hand
, learning individually does not make success and can not be positive all the time, because if
person
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study
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 in
this
 learning system , he will not a chance to contrast his degree of knowledge with other
students'
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. It will be more positive and more interesting at studying in a group .
For instance
 , if
one
 is
touch
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 by
educator
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an educator
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 with other students, there will be
discussion
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a discussion
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 of lots of
theme
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,
one
 can now others' opinions about that and it
cause
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of
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their outlook is improved and their education is improved. To recapitulate,
although
 learning alone is preferred by some people, I wholeheartedly believe that the method of studying with a group makes better results and chances rather than individual ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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