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Human activities over the period of time have increased global warming. What are the primary causes? What solutions can you suggest?

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Climate change is one of the serious topics of the world. There is a huge surge in global warming due to an enormous amount of pollution. Using plastics and polluting water due to draining chemicals by factories are some of the major causes of
this
 issue. I will discuss these problems and solutions in my forthcoming essay.
Firstly
,
an
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 invention of plastic has made our life easy but recycling not properly could be dangerous for the environment.
Secondly
, the waste produced by factories are drained into the sea or freshwater could be hazardous for marine as well as for human life.
For instance
, in
India
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 many factories are situated near the sea areas releases tons of waste products into the water, which is perilous for the plants and fishes. These fishes are consumed by humans can cause Minamata disease.
Moreover
, due to the use of lots of energy fuels like petrol, diesel can cause detrimental effects on our health and the environment. To solve
this
 problem recycling centres should be more encouraged by the government. Campaigning could
also
 be beneficial for the environment by making people aware of the consequences created by them. Tough measures should be taken by the government for disposing of waste material could
also
 alleviate the problem.
For instance
, in some places of India plastics are banned.
In addition
 to
this
 reusing them and carefully
disposing
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 can make a change in our climate.
Furthermore
, using electric cars and less use of fuels can lead towards a cleaner world. Our earth is precious.
Hence
 it is our responsibility to keep our planet safe and give a better place to live for our future generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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