Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

In

this

modern scenario,the advances in technology

has

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been increasing day by day,

therefore

it enables more data for all

people

without age disparities.

however

,there will be no prospect to

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secrets of many individuals,which means that everyone can

knows

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our personal messages.

although

the

internet

brings few negative causes,there are

also

more benefits to

this

trend.

this

essay will go into better detail with my subject view. To embark on,the main benefit of using the

internet

continuously is we can acquire more knowledge about the outer world and we may be updated with the latest news as well as we can know what is happening around us and what government is going to

take

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decisions to modify the amenities around the globe.

secondly

,nowadays,it is

difficulty

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to spend quality time with friends and relatives,so the

internet

facilitates many amenities in terms of

communication

and entertainment purposes.

consequently

,multitudes can be communicated with their friends and families through the social websites

such

as Facebook,Twitter and WhatsApp,

thus

these apps made easier

communication

among

people

.

moreover

,it not only ensures audio call but

also

enable

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video

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call facility.

for example

,my parents are residing very far away from me,so I daily use to interact with my family through

face

to

face

call

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. On another hand,it is truly said,no rose without thrones.can the drawback of

this

initiation can be ignored.the most significant drawback is that reduction in the

face

to

face

communication

,

then

it will

leads

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to

spoil

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the

realtionships

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relationships

relationship

between the multitudes.

for example

,when I was young,many

people

used to talk to

directly

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without any involvement of the

internet

.as

result

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of

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,

people

could make harmonious

realtionships

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relationships

with everyone.

furthermore

,another disadvantage is that children may not have concentrated

towards

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on

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the

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their

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studies because they are already habituated to playing

the

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games. To conclude,every coin has both sides.using

of

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social media facilitates more benefits than demerits.the pros are easier

communication

and

updated

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with the news.the cons are reduction concentration in other activities as well as relationships.