Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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that spending all of our
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to work
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in just one place is not good as working to the different companies. In my opinion, I prefer to
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my working life with different companies because I could get more experiences through it and
in addition
, I could get some friends which
also
add my connections. Working in one company
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our
lifetime
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is not the wrong choice indeed. Imagine that we have already spent
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years in there, we might be promoted as senior staff or any higher position and of
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we will know more about other co-workers.
However
, if we are in the same environment
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a long
time
, it will make us feel bored.
Moreover
, we might get stressed more easily and it will affect our performance at work.
On the other hand
, spending our
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different places would not make us feel monotonous because we experienced many different types of environments which will teach us how to be
adaptable
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person which is one of the positive things. We will
also
meet new people who give us new insights,
knowledges
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, and lessons for us to improve
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skillsets. By that means we will get so many connections for sharing, working together, or any other purposes. In conclusion, spending all of our working life in some different workplaces is the best decision rather than stuck working in the same place in a long
time
because we will get more experiences and more friends to work
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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