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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment??

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Some
people
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 believe that there are more benefits to living in an
apartment
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, while others desire to live in a
house
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss why there are more merits than demerits of living in an
apartment
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 compared with a
house
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.
Firstly
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, one of the most significant merits of settling in an
apartment
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 is the low cost of
the
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maintenance and utility.
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, the building management will arrange the cleaners for every week in order to maintain or
cleaning
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 the whole flat.
Moreover
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, since the size of the
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house
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housing
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 unit is not large, electricity will cost significantly lesser than using
in
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it in
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 a
house
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. Comparing
this
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,
people
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 who live in a
house
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 will have to manage to clean or maintain the
house
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 by themselves and the costs will be higher.
Secondly
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, another
advantages
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 of staying in a condo over a
house
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is
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are
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safety
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 because all apartments have security gates and
security
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the security
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guard
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guards
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 will examine the
people
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 who want to get access
in to
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into
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 the condo.
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, some
people
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 who want to enter the condo,
they
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have to prove whether they get
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an invitation
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invitation
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invitations
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 from residents and that makes tenants more
safety
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. Contrasting
this
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 those who live in a private
house
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,
they
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apply
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may have to hire a security guard in order to check for entry access
otherwise
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 it will be
lack
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a lack
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 of safe. To conclude, due to some problems of living in a
house
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such
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 as being expensive and lack of
safety
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, I believe that settling in an
apartment
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 has more benefits of low cost and more
safety
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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