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The diagram
describe
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 the information about the alterations in the west
park
 secondary
school
 in three various periods 1950, 1980 and 2010. Looking
an
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 overall perspective, the
school
 had become changed gradually as compared to the initial period with sports,
play
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playground
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ground
 and science block areas were built. In 1950, the west
park
 secondary
school
 was contained houses,
school
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, agricultural land and
play
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playground
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ground
, top of the
school
 had the main road. By 1980, the houses were replaced by the car
park
 and science block. The
school
 had been changed the main building of
school
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the school
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. The farmland to make way for the sports field and main road and
play
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playground
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ground
 had unchanged. In terms of 2010, the
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playground
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play
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playground
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ground
 area had
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shrieked
shrinked
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 and
sports
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 field was relocated in the
next
 of the
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playground
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play
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playground
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ground
 place. The car
park
 was
extented
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extended
 and the
school
 main building and the main road were unchanged.
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