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Governments should spent money on railways rather than roads To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#governments #money #railways #roads
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I have to venture out of my comfort zone. I always dreamed that when my leadership skills were so advanced, I would create a
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 to have a positive impact on society, especially the incapacitated who can't get
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 health. Leadership skills I can get by contributing to committee activities. Participating in these activities can make me adapt to the environment that I have. To create a great
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 and
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, and
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 as its
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. Before realizing the
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, I must have a detailed concept and framework about the
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. Starting from the creation of vision and mission, goals, benefits, to the right goals for the
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 do open recruitment in finding core
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. In my opinion as a
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, core
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 are very useful because the core
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 are the most trusted in a group or
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 by the
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. I have to put myself in place and understand my role as a
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 for my
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. In the
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, many problems occur,
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 as the fragmentation of many voices in
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 case is to mediate and weigh the pros and cons related to the results of that decision-making, in
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 I must be fair and take logically the best decision and understand the
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 that will be faced. Another task is that a
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 not only develops his own campaign
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 but
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 inspires his
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. The
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 plays a role in how for his
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 to develop and apply their abilities. I need to be open to constructive criticism to improve the progress of the
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. I should
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 always evaluate what has been done in order to modify if a
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 in the future faces the same problem. The result of healthy leadership is that
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 and leaders do not feel under pressure, do not feel used by a
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,
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 are comfortable to develop their abilities, and have the same vision to make the
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 in line with what we expect.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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