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Some people think that all University student study whatever the like. Other believe that they should only be allowed to to study subject that will be useful in future. Such as those related to science and technology. discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #student #study #future #science #technology
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 are arguing that
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 students should
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 to study related
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the university
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 claim that
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student
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students
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 only
study
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 the
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helpful
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 appear to be more rational.
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 and negative effects of
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 will lead to a logical conclusion. There are some reasons why students should choose
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subject
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 whatever they like. The
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 and foremost is that it students should have technical
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 but not necessary that operation can only make the career in technology. Some
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 explore their fields like fashion designing at museum acting or animation. It not only have have a promising
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 provide good money . If they choose the
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course to their interest they work hard because they have enough
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 they spend their most time in their courses. In
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, after
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study
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 they get
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 job related
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 field.
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 ,if
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mechanical
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engineers
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 have enough
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 about
instrument
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 so they solve any difficulty easily related to
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the machine
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machine
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machines
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. Alternatively, other people think that they should only
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 the
subject
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 that will
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future
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. We have connected with many things which need technical
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also
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 it is undeniable merit that science and technology could be lead to find easily occupation in
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 decade. Because of
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demand
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future
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example
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scientist
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scientists
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 are not only working for
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future
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 but
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 for making everyone's better
future
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. In conclusion ,I suppose,
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 in the hand of a
student
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 to think and decided. It will create a balance in society among all the
professional
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professionals
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 and when the
student
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 can provide the opportunity to choose their
subject
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