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The most important element in a person’s life is their work. Without a satisfying career, life is meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Individuals from different walks of
life
has
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a
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great ambition with regards to the
job
 that they are
practicing
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 because it gives full satisfaction and meaning to their
life
. I completely agree with the notion. On the one hand, people in the society is procuring the security and stability of career due to the fact that it signifies a socioeconomic status of a family, apart from that, it gives a complete meaning
of
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 their
life
.
For instance
, having a high
labeled
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 profession; an individual is fully pledged and
well compensated
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 both physical and mental,
hence
 the status in the society is
also
 appreciated.
On the other hand
,
human
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a human
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 being with solidified work has a high remuneration wherein it could
preovied
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provide
provided
 the essential needs
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within
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with in
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 the family circle. Working in a prestigious hospital as a
physican
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physician
 is a
cecirone
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cicerone
 to
this
,
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 because a man could render a good service to their family after putting
a food
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food
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 on their table.
As a result
, having a father with
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satisfactory
staisfactory
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job
 will lead to the stability of the economic status of
family
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the family
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. By and large, people with
great
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job
 has a great future. As well as, their family will not be affected
of
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for the reason that they are stable and
secured
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.
Besides
, people are feeling satisfied and their
life
 is meaningful once
job
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 is stable.
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