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Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience.

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people
 think that the most
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 method of learning about
life
 is by receiving
to
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the
advise
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advice
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 of family and friends. It is considered by some
people
 that personal experience is the best
way
 of learning about
life
.
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,
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 most teenagers prefer to
listen
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 old
people
 for learning about
life
 due to
have
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experiance
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experience
experienced
about
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of
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life
such
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 kind of situation
people
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 who are older than us.The best
way
learning
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 future
life
which
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is
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discuss
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with
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 family members.
For instance
, adolescents
havenot
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have not
haven't
 experienced and they may
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 difficult problems
for
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 instance, less economics, lose wealth and
also
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related
 to their health so they need to listen clearly
their
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 parents and experienced friends without disappointments.
On the other hand
,
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 most
people
 think that
the
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personal
experiance
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experience
 is
effective
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an effective
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way
 to learn about
life
 because if
people
experiance
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experience
during
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it during
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 their adolescent
life
, it is beneficial and useful for
next
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life
. Each person
need
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 to control their
life
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 because
of
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all problems will
be solve
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 by themselves so everything depends on themselves. As an example of
this
, all famous
people
 don't have
advicers
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advisers
 to learn about
life
 but they achieve
themselves
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their goals without old
people
 or friends. In conclusion, Individual existence is the easiest
way
 to learn about
life
 for every young
people
.
As a result
,they know
different
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kind
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 of problems,be
patience
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 and
also
 how to enter
difficult
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the difficult
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situation
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situations
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.
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