A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In
this
day and age,
people
judge the other
person
based upon their social
status
and materialistic possessions. The traditional values
such
as honour, kindness and trust become
an unimportant things
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when it comes to
judge
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other
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person
. I strongly disagree with
this
trend because I think
this
should not be the criteria to judge someone's worth. In the
last
few years, the truth about
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person
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with
higher
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level
on
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social
status
has increased. In my opinion,
this
phenomenon is supported by the growth of social
media
that can be accessed by everyone from
different
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level
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on social
status
.
People
are craving
for
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praises
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and honour, and social
media
has
became
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a perfect place to show their “perfect” life easily to everyone around the world. Every
person
on social
media
tend to follow a
person
who has a good quality of
content
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(
such
as nature-travelling around the world, luxurious things, and many more), and it is mostly come out from the
person
who has higher social
status
. Not a few
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I know that willing to do anything out of their real-life conditions just to be seen on social
media
,
hence
at
this
point, honesty become much less important in terms of respect. Apart from that, the real society outside social
media
is supporting the
ideas
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of
respect
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someone based on their wealth.
For instance
, sharing my personal experience, some of the
people
in my social organization only care about
people
who have more
money
when it comes to making decisions. It seems like
money
has bigger power to urge
people
to do something.
Hence
,
this
proves that
money
is more important in the eyes of
people
. To conclude, the reasons I stated below is describing why a
person
's worth is judged upon
the
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societal
status
and materialistic possessions. Nowadays the old fashioned values are having
a
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less attention and I totally disagree with it. As per me, these values or attributes are reflecting someone’s
truly
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is, while
money
is just an outside
factors
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that
temporarily
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attached to a
person
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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