A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In
this
day and age, Linking Words
people
judge the other Use synonyms
person
based upon their social Use synonyms
status
and materialistic possessions. The traditional values Use synonyms
such
as honour, kindness and trust become Linking Words
an unimportant things
when it comes to Correct the article-noun agreement
an unimportant thing
unimportant things
judge
Change the verb form
judging
other
Change the wording
another person
other people
person
. I strongly disagree with Use synonyms
this
trend because I think Linking Words
this
should not be the criteria to judge someone's worth.
In the Linking Words
last
few years, the truth about Linking Words
respect
Wrong verb form
respecting
Use synonyms
person
with Fix the agreement mistake
people
higher
level Add an article
a higher
on
social Change preposition
of
status
has increased. In my opinion, Use synonyms
this
phenomenon is supported by the growth of social Linking Words
media
that can be accessed by everyone from Use synonyms
different
Add an article
the different
a different
level
on social Fix the agreement mistake
levels
status
. Use synonyms
People
are craving Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
apply
praises
and honour, and social Fix the agreement mistake
praise
media
has Use synonyms
became
a perfect place to show their “perfect” life easily to everyone around the world. Every Change the verb form
become
person
on social Use synonyms
media
tend to follow a Use synonyms
person
who has a good quality of Use synonyms
content
(Add an article
the content
such
as nature-travelling around the world, luxurious things, and many more), and it is mostly come out from the Linking Words
person
who has higher social Use synonyms
status
. Not a few Use synonyms
Use synonyms
person
I know that willing to do anything out of their real-life conditions just to be seen on social Change to a plural noun
people
media
, Use synonyms
hence
at Linking Words
this
point, honesty become much less important in terms of respect.
Apart from that, the real society outside social Linking Words
media
is supporting the Use synonyms
ideas
of Fix the agreement mistake
idea
respect
someone based on their wealth. Wrong verb form
respecting
For instance
, sharing my personal experience, some of the Linking Words
people
in my social organization only care about Use synonyms
people
who have more Use synonyms
money
when it comes to making decisions. It seems like Use synonyms
money
has bigger power to urge Use synonyms
people
to do something. Use synonyms
Hence
, Linking Words
this
proves that Linking Words
money
is more important in the eyes of Use synonyms
people
.
To conclude, the reasons I stated below is describing why a Use synonyms
person
's worth is judged upon Use synonyms
the
societal Correct article usage
apply
status
and materialistic possessions. Nowadays the old fashioned values are having Use synonyms
a
less attention and I totally disagree with it. As per me, these values or attributes are reflecting someone’s Remove the article
apply
truly
is, while Replace the word
truth
money
is just an outside Use synonyms
factors
that Correct the article-noun agreement
factor
temporarily
attached to a Add a missing verb
is temporarily
person
.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite