many people feel it is waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or blue whale. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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animals
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animals
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savanna or in the ocean. For
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numerous
people
sustain
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a loss of money to take care
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them. There are likely to be a number of reasons for
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this
theory. One widely held view by supporters could be thinking that these
animals
are only enemies for humans. Indeed, it is extremely challenging for them to be able to have
the
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control
on
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animal species because are aggressive and is impossible
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them as pets.
People
usually are afraid and
uncapable
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incapable
to react. Another possible reason could be that for saving
animals
which are enormous dimensions is necessary
a very expensive equipment
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.
In addition
,
people
are forced to work a large number of hours that could be invested in other activities.
On the other hand
,
people
who pay particular attention to our world are aware that it is essential to prevent the existential of all
animals
. In fact, all species take part
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a complex chain
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is responsible to regulate,
for instance
, climate changes.
Moreover
, critics may base their idea on
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reasons, and so it is not
an
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human faculty
decide
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who have to survive and what
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has to triumph. In my view, it is fundamental to take care
about
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our planet to improve the quality of our lives.
Consequently
, it is essential to preserve all species living in the world, including dangerous
animals
, so I disagree with
this
theory. To sum up, I believe it is correct to have priorities in economic and times terms.
However
,
people
should not forget the environment in which they live,
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to be able to guarantee a healthy life for future generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • intrinsic value
  • existential threat
  • ecosystem
  • conservation
  • economic benefits
  • funding allocation
  • competing needs
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