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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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Several
people
 admire to try innovations as to be in new lands and taste different food from
another
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another place
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places
 while some
people
 are selecting to carry on regular
things
 that they well know. In my opinion,
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 has advantages and disadvantages which will discuss below.
Let
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 start with
advantages
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 of
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a
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trip
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 to new locations and
try
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trying
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 new types of foods. As we know, most of us try to make true
their
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 dreams about
to travel
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traveling
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 around the world to acquaint with new
people
 and taste anything that they have never eaten anywhere. So by visiting unknown spaces they can get relaxation and learn aborigine's traditions. And some
people
 travel to new
places
 to discover new tastes that they never see them. In my view, being in
another
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places
, everyone can get an opportunity to get know about new nations and exchange their experiences about
things
 and something about foods, especially dishes receipts from other
people
. It needs to be said about
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 sides of it. Most
of
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people
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the people
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 prefer to stay at home
instead
 of trying new
things
 like travelling and getting to know new tastes.
However
, these actions of
people
 have their reasons. The
first
 of them is that some
people
 do not like to change anything in
thier
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their
 lifestyle so they prefer to ignore
these thing
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. In my opinion, it is normal but I think everyone needs to try new
things
. In
conslussion
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conclusion
, we can say that by trying something new
people
 have a chance to know more than doing nothing in familiar
places
.
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  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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