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Nuclear power is far too dangerous. Therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources of energy such as hydroelectric power, wind power, and solar energy.

#power #countries #ban #alternative #sources #energy #wind
Radioactive materials are present in nuclear
energy
. These
radio active
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 materials are a matter of serious concern to
environment
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 and human beings, which results in the ban of
the
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nuclear
power
 by many developing countries. Sustainable
energy
 is considered to be
a
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 alternative
source
 of
energy
. Some people, remember the most terrific event of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in 1945, where nuclear
power
 was used in form of atomic bombs which resulted
into
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 devasting effects on
human
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humans
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, animals, plants and
environment
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.
These
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radio active
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 waste remains for thousands of years. It causes lung cancer and
other cardiovascular disease
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another cardiovascular disease
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among
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 humans. If nuclear
energy
 is being properly stored, transported and
disposed
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 can be a huge advantage to humans. Many people consider the impacts of nuclear
power
 as a
zero emission
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, clean and reliable
source
 of
energy
.
For instance
, nuclear
power
 helps to keep
air
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the air
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 clean by removing harmful air pollutant that contributes to acid rain and smog. It produces
massive
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 amount of
carbon free
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energy
, which is used to generate electricity on a small amount of land compared to any other
source
 of
energy
.
In contrast
,
alternative
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source
 of
energy
 is expensive
especially
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 for developing countries. because they are underdeveloped. They
also
 need a large of land and damage the
environment
. Having considered the positive and negative impacts of nuclear
power
, I propose that nuclear
power
 has huge impacts on
human
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 and
environment
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 but with proper
care
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 it can
the
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 future trustworthy
energy
source
.
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