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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 would argue that the adolescent
years
 are considered to be the happiest in the majority of
people
's lives, while others say that being an adult brings more happiness even though it comes with numerous responsibilities.
Although
 teenagers have a
life
 of freedom, I believe that adult
life
 brings more delight as they are financially independent. On the one hand, young
people
 are extremely happy during their teenage
years
 because they have fewer responsibilities.
That is
 to say that, teenagers are not expected to earn
money
 and pay bills for any expenses, as adults are there to fulfil these duties.
As a result
, they are free to play, study and appreciate their
life
 without any obligations.
For example
, all over the globe teenagers feel more content because they were not worried about anything
especially
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 finances.
However
, I believe that adolescent is under pressure to achieve good grades in their academic
years
 while at college.
On the other hand
, despite the fact that adulthood carries more responsibility,
people
 are the happiest at that time because they are not dependent on anyone for their finances.
Instead
, they are earning an income, which gives them independence. Having, a well-established career allows them to save and spend
money
 on things they want for themselves and their family members.
For instance
,
people
 around the world are happy when
become
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becoming
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 adults because they can earn
money
 and purchase items they adore. I believe that a sense of power is achieved by earning
money
 which makes
people
 happy and free. In conclusion,
although
 most believe that the adolescent
years
 are the happiest
years
 of
life
 as they are not under pressure, being an adult brings more contentment despite enormous responsibilities because
people
 are financially independent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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