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As most people spend a major part of their adults life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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In the modern world, most adults have
fulltime
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full-time
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job
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jobs
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 and work to support
live
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 costs and their sense of
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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, so
job
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 satisfaction is a
principle
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principal
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 element of individual welfare.
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about
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three factors
which
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that
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 lead to
job
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 content and realistic that for all workers. Possibly, there are three major factors
which
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that
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 contribute to
job
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 comfort.
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, people tend to have a
job
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 that
generate
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 to
sense
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a sense
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 of
valuable
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 and it is so essential for them. If they
accepted
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from
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 their boss, they would have
job
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 pleasure. The other factor is progression
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, people need to improve their skills and talents and should to provide situations which they can learn new things and level up in their
job
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.
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, employers choose that works have
superb
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the superb
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salary
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salaries
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 to support living costs.
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, international and large companies pay rise regularly.
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, workers have satisfied there. Of course, it is not possible for all employers the great opportunities to have suitable work.
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, always
job
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 offers are limited with many competition
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, people should update their information and improve their skills to achieve a superb
situations
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 and
consequently
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,
job
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 satisfaction.
On
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 conclusion, there are many factors to have
job
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fulfillment
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fulfilment
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 and feel welfare but it is not possible for all workers and opportunities are limited in today's competitive world.
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