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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has a debate about what years are the happiest
lifetime
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 between youngest and oldest
people
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.
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, teenagers
discribe
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describe
 their period of
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as
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 a hyperactive age while adults think that their
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lifetime
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 is the best, it is due to a huge amount of experience
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is make
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 them happiest. In my opinion, both of these
life
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time
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 have their special relaxation to being happy
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 impossible to compare with other ages.
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, these views will be analyzed below. Some young
people
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 imagine that their lifestyle
make
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 them glad cause of energetic performance that
give
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 them chance to be possible to do more complex
intellegence
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intelligence
 actions which always decrease with stages of
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lifetime
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.
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, younger individuals are flexible
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 any
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 and have great enthusiasm to work
on
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 different conditions.
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, all of these positive sides of young age give ensure to achieve
happiness
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. In my point of
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, when
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a person
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 is younger, he has a big chance to climb the top of
happiness
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, because, at that
time
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 young generation built their basis of
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happiness
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 life.
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, others have another
view
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 about
happiness
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 age. Major of
people
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 believe that
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 years are the golden period when anyone
start
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 understanding the gist of life
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 the key factor of
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 happy, because of their
experinces
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experiences
experience
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,
people
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's point of
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 about
meaning
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the meaning
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 of
happiness
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 is changed by some factors, especially health problems.
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,
to be
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health
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 is formed as a main element of
happiness
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 for most
of
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adults
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the adults
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. In my
view
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, it is true that
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 of
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lifetime
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a lifetime
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 influence
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adults' ideas about
happiness
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. To sum up, both of these
time
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 periods have their own part of
happiness
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 that cannot be rejected or compared with any views.
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, we need to only realise that the meaning of
happiness
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 has been altered by the exact stage of
time
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