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Some people believe government should spend more money in saving languages of few speaker from dying completely. Other think this is a waste of financial resourses. Discuss both view and give opinion.

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Due to globalization,
languages
 are more unified.
This
 result in losing inheritors of some minority
languages
.
Thus
, there has been a controversial debate on whether the government should spend money to rescue the dying
languages
. While some people are violently opposed to
this
 idea and consider it is a waste of financial
resources
. Both views will be discussed below followed by a personal opinion. To commence with,
languages
 is the reflection of a culture. It contains the history and background of the community, which
also
 carry many connotations and connections.
Therefore
, it is worthy for the government to spend more money in order to protect and promote the dying
languages
, as well as rescue them from forfeit. The promotion can keep the cultures diversification and ensure the civilization being spread.
On the contrary
, others think the financial
resources
 should be spent on something more important.
For example
, more money should be put into education or the environment in order to maintain productivity and living standards. As
languages
 are a component of soft power, still hard power is usually preferable to soft power.
Therefore
, the growth of the country may be more important than the language. And
as a result
, other elements
such
 as education, infrastructure rather than
languages
 should be funded. In conclusion, language may be the concentration of a culture and it has a deep connection with society. Whereas other components can
also
 be necessary for the country. In my opinion, protecting
languages
 is not a waste of financial
resources
 as cultures can give citizens a sense of belonging in society.
Therefore
, rational spending will not be a burden on financial
resources
 but can bring people back together.
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