in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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