Nowadays celebrities are more famous their glamour and wealth than their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people, what extent do you agree or disagree
Present,famous names are known by their charm and opulence than their accomplishments and
this
effects
a bad instance to the Correct your spelling
affects
youth
generation. I completely agree with the statement that celebrities are a very bad example to the youth
with their richness and fascination.
Firstly
, famous
Add an article
the famous
a famous
community
should behave responsibly because they exert an enormous influence on teenagers.if they forget their responsibilities,it would consist wrong examples for Fix the agreement mistake
communities
youth
in my country every young person generally want for earn money as notables but, most of them can not reach their goals. they might be disappointed in their life travel celebrities are always in the spotlight.everybody curious
about their opulence and way of Add a missing verb
is curious
living
.success of Add an article
the living
famous
should be exampled Correct article usage
the famous
to
Change preposition
by
youth
.young Correct article usage
the youth
people
need positive role models in order to live with hope,integrity and compassion. For instance
,some of the reputable people
contribute a few charity commissions as they act like this
,young people
could see that you can be very successful and a very good person of the same time
secondly
,some people
say that a celebrities job is to entertain people
not to set a moral example. this
is time but not exact.everybody has a job but all people
can not be seen by the public.they are stars.they should be role models.
in conclusion,famous people
should be good examples for the youth
generation.thus
they would contribute to the country's human qualitySubmitted by ssunay2001 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
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Linking word examples:
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