Hosting international sporting competitions is good,but few people think this causes too many problems. Explain both views and tell your opinion.

Some
people
think, hosting a
sports
competition at an international
level
is a bad idea and not beneficial for the country whereas some
people
show their interest in these
competitions
. According to me,
sports
play an important role in the development of the country in one or
other
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another
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way and for the promotion of these
games
, it is necessary to host various
competitions
at the international
level
. On the one hand, by hosting international
sports
events
, some
people
might get interested in
sports
or maybe some
people
stand on the opposite side but there are various benefits of these
competitions
.
Firstly
, these
events
help an individual (sportsperson) in their personal growth in their particular sport and
also
promote our
games
at international
level
for
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,for
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instance, Kabbadi is the game which was played only by Indians but by these international
events
, the game has achieved the position at international
level
and now it is played worldwide.
On the other hand
, by hosting these
competitions
, many
people
might get attracted
towards
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sports
. We can observe, children or students are least interested in playing physical
games
and
sports
because of developments in technology and
availability
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the availability
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of mobiles and
computer
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computers
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. Almost every child nowadays opts to play video
games
rather than playing in the fields. So by hosting these
competitions
, it might be beneficial for them if they get attracted towards
sports
which
maybe
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may be
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a great carrier for them. To conclude, It is necessary for either private companies or governments to host the international
sports
competitions
which
is
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are
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very important for the promotion of our
games
as well as for the children to attract them towards physical activities. In my opinion, these
events
are important as well as beneficial for
country
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the country
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.
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