Some people think that it is better for a country’s economy for people to spend money while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
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by
certain individuals that spending Change preposition
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money
improves a nation's economic status Use synonyms
while
others believe that saving does that better. Personally, I opine that keeping Linking Words
money
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use
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country
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economy
since more Use synonyms
people
will be financially stable. Use synonyms
Therefore
in Linking Words
this
essay, I will tackle both these views and provide a conclusion.
First and foremost, putting Linking Words
money
to Use synonyms
use
ensures that more of it remains in circulation. Use synonyms
In other words
, because a lot of Linking Words
people
spend Use synonyms
money
, it accords the masses more chances to get hold of it and Use synonyms
thus
reduces the burden of being broke. Linking Words
This
in itself is a plus for a Linking Words
country
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economy
because not only does the Use synonyms
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also
its inflation rate reduces significantly. Take, Linking Words
for example
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in
a survey conducted on the benefits of having more Change preposition
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people
spending their Use synonyms
money
, it was determined that the inflation rate reduced by more than 89 per cent as opposed to when they were saving. In the long run, Use synonyms
this
influences a Linking Words
country
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economy
positively. Use synonyms
Nonetheless
, taking Linking Words
this
route oftentimes results in more broke Linking Words
people
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none
use
. Based on Use synonyms
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fact, I feel spending more does not help a Linking Words
country
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economy
at all
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On the other hand
, when a lot of Linking Words
people
keep the Use synonyms
money
for future Use synonyms
use
, it enables them to undertake projects that they would Use synonyms
otherwise
not have been able to do under normal circumstances. To put Linking Words
this
in perspective, it is only when the masses save Linking Words
money
that they Use synonyms
would
be able to build new houses or start a new business with a higher amount from their savings. Wrong verb form
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For instance
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due to
the low-income Linking Words
people
are currently earning, most of them are unable to start a company unless they get a loan or credit card which Use synonyms
further
cripples the Linking Words
country
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economy
. The opposite is true when Use synonyms
people
have been saving. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, saving at times takes Linking Words
money
out of circulation as Use synonyms
people
will rarely be using it. Yet, that can be overcome by restricting the amount and period one can save.
By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my position that storing Use synonyms
money
for future Use synonyms
use
is better than just using it anyhow. The latter only works as a temporal method of improving a Use synonyms
country
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while
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long term
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task response
In your essay, you have presented both sides of the argument and given your opinion. However, be cautious of not presenting a biased view. Consider providing a more balanced structure in presenting both arguments, and ensure that the opinion is clear and well-supported.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay shows good logical structure, and the introduction and conclusion are well-presented. However, work on using cohesive devices more effectively, such as transition words and linking phrases, to improve your essay's overall coherence.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.