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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #climate #change
In the
last
 few
years
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climate
change
 is a common topic of discussion. Different organisations are trying to convince the
soicety
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society
, that
climate
change
 is a problem, that can lead to
fatal
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 end.
However
, some people believe, that we should not try to prevent
climate
change
, but
to
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find a way to live with it.
Climate
change
 is not a myth, but it is something
that is
 happening right now. The volatility of temperatures is the best example
for
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 that. In
Bulgaria
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 summer is becoming longer and hotter.
Climate
change
 has a very negative impact on
environment
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the environment
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 - forests are being destroyed because of fires, animals are dying because of
change
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 in their habitat, glaciers are melting. But all of
this
 leads to other problems.
For instance
, because of the absence of enough trees, air will become even more polluted.
Furthermore
, more health issues connected with our lungs will occur.
On the contrary
, some people tend to believe, that we should not fight against
the
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climate
change
, but
to
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work with it and
to
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accept it.
Thus
, they think, that
this
 is
natural
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 outcome and nature knows what is best for it. In the
last
 decade some revolutionary discoveries were made and scientists believe, that life on Mars is possible,
therefore
 people are not worried about
climate
change
, knowing that we will be able to move to
other planet
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another planet
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,
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 if our disappears. In conclusion, I believe that
climate
change
 is a really big danger and we should try to save our planet Earth from it. I don't see why we should give up
from
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 it just because other options may be available. The fact is, that life ends with our death, but Earth continues to exist and we should keep that so.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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