Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for the charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The world has become a safer place due to the
volenteers
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volunteers
. There is a debate between people as the free volunteering activities should be a mandatory of high school programmes as
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, improving the neighbourhood or
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catching
the youngster for sports. I totally agree with
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statement and it will
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in
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essay. The future wellbeing of
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society is
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the hands of the kids and education
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are the places
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are crafted children towards that aim. By imposing to engage social services, pupils are gradually
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generous.
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, Greta
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student who was appeared against
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global
warming has begun a remarkable influence
to
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the
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wellbeing.
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of
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many organisations reduced their mal-activities which are related to
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pupils are being under stress due to the heavy workload at colleges. In
oder
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order
to happen
this
situation, the youth become more unhealthy by affecting severe diseases. To illustrate, less
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, obesity, and even
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also
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the kids. To overcome the stress that
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children faced
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, these
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of charitable works are essential. Since
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the daily routine is subjected to change and the community works give the mental health to them simultaneously. All
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all, the charitable works to be
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thing in the
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syllabus whereas pupils encourage to engage in social wellbeing as well as to improve their mental and physical health. As I truly agree with the statement and it has
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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