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Completing university educationn is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#university #educationn #job #hand #people #skills
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the
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modern
times
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individual
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individuals
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 are not focusing on only
one
career
 option
instead
 they tend to focus on multiple
opportunity
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 to earn more money or to enhance their skill. I completely agree
to
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 the statement. In
this
essay
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 I will brief the benefits of having more than
one
career
 opportunity. On
one
 hand, many professionals are focusing on multiple
career
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to support their family in
current
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 economic shrink.
In addition
, the current job market is not secure so an individual
have
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 to earn additional money to secure themself from the unemployment situation.
This
 situation creates a need to earn more than usual. So,
a
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individuals are moonlighting their careers with more than
one
 company. In brief, the majority of information technology employees in the
work
 from
home
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the home
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 environment are moonlighting their
work
 to another company during their free time to earn extra money.
On the other hand
, some
peoples
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people
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 are majorly concentrating on the education prospect to ace that knowledge related to the job.
Additionally
, adding educational
qualification
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qualifications
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 will lend a route for
a promotions
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promotions
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 in many of the corporate.
This
 makes some
of
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the
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people
to
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diversify their
career
 options. To support
this
 opinion, many individuals in the accounting firms will study for their professional qualification simultaneous to ace the subject with practical knowledge. To conclude, without having multiple options in hand a person cannot survive in the market for
longer
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 time.
At-least
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any
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anyone
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one
 among should be done either to
work
 or to study.
Work
 will help a person on monetary prospect and education will help the individual on the future prospect. But in the current times working in only
one
career
 will not be fruitful
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 to another.
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