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There are a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions?

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"Drinkable
water
 will be a subject of conflict between nations in the near future." A review that was published in a high-rated journal states that. What it means is that there will be a lack of sweet
water
 all over the world. Here the reasons for
this
 statement will be discussed, and some remedies will be suggested. Nowadays, the need for clear
water
 is increasing because of the significant growth of
water
-consuming industries as well as farming. Since the population is growing, those companies need to rise and become greater to provide enough goods and food in harmony with the population.
This
 leads to an increase in the size of those industries. What it means is they consume more
water
 than in the past. Most of these companies have to use just freshwater and purifying salty
water
 like seawater is cost too much to afford for them.
Additionally
, there is a decrease in freshwater treasures around the world. Due to climate change, the level of rain which is the main source of unsalty
water
 is falling.
As a result
, underground
water
 reservoirs will become empty in the near future.
This
 worsens the situation. What actions have to be done to tackle
this
 disaster? to answer
this
 question, it is worth mentioning that both government and the owners of those companies are responsible. Governments can add the tax on the increased
water
 consumption, and with the aid of the collected money, it can improve the infrastructure which is needed
to
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water
 so that the use of freshwater reservoirs will be decreased.
On the other hand
, owners have to keep their industry up to date. They should apply cutting edge technologies that are more efficient in order to decrease
water
 consumption. In conclusion, it is obvious that there will be a worldwide sweet
water
 shortage in the
next
 years.
This
 has resulted from an increase in overall consumption and a decrease in the amount of available freshwater. To relieve
this
 situation, both governments and industries have duties.
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