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nowadays there are many people who have self employed than working in the office do you agree? what is the disadvantages? give the reason!

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In
this
 modern scenario,many individuals want to keep their own businesses
instead
 of working in other companies as they feel shame to get a job in another
company
 because they have to do
work
 under the boss,so I accord with
this
 statement.
This
 essay will discuss the demerits of having
a
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 own
company
. To embark on,there are multiple reasons why
people
 are choosing to start their self firm.
firstly
,these days,many organisations use to keep stress their employees due to the heavy
work
,so
people
 have to spend
the
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most of the
time
 at firms only,In
this
 way,
people
 do not have enough
time
 to meet their families.
for instance
,nowadays,IT jobs have become common among the
people
,so more than 50% of
people
 are
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doing
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doings
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doing
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 jobs in software companies
such
 as Infosys and TCS,but these firms used to
work
their
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with their
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 employees consistently without the
time
 boundary.
Secondly
 ,some
oraganisations
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organisations
organizations
 offer low income to workers,
thus
this
also
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is also
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 one of the significant reasons to resign jobs.
Furthermore
,some leaders of companies may not have good behaviour which is a very imperative tool to
work
 for
people
 who are working in that
company
. On another hand,there are
also
 some demerits of establishing a self office.
Initially
,
to set
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setting
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 up
a
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an
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 own business requires
a
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income and leadership skills.
for example
,
the
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 financial matter plays an important role to start a
company
,so without leadership skills and income
people
 can not start their own business,
then
 it will result in spoiling their life.
Furthermore
,another disadvantage is that responsibility can be increased.
Consequently
,
people
 who
starts
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start
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 their own firms are the only
responsible
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ones responsible
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 for that
company
. To conclude,
self employed
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self-employed
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 brings more advantages for all
people
 in terms of enough
time
 and
good
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a good
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 salary.
Although
 benefits to
this
 trend,there are
also
 some demerits
such
 as responsibility and leadership skills.
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