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nowadays there are many people who have self employed than working in the office do you agree? what is the disadvantages? give the reason!

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In
this
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 modern scenario,many individuals want to keep their own businesses
instead
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 of working in other companies as they feel shame to get a job in another
company
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 because they have to do
work
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 under the boss,so I accord with
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 statement.
This
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 own
company
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. To embark on,there are multiple reasons why
people
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 are choosing to start their self firm.
firstly
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,these days,many organisations use to keep stress their employees due to the heavy
work
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,so
people
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 have to spend
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most of the
time
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 at firms only,In
this
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 way,
people
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 do not have enough
time
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 to meet their families.
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,nowadays,IT jobs have become common among the
people
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,so more than 50% of
people
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 are
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doing
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doings
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doing
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 jobs in software companies
such
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 as Infosys and TCS,but these firms used to
work
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their
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with their
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 employees consistently without the
time
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 boundary.
Secondly
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 ,some
oraganisations
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organisations
organizations
 offer low income to workers,
thus
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this
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also
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is also
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 one of the significant reasons to resign jobs.
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,some leaders of companies may not have good behaviour which is a very imperative tool to
work
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 for
people
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 who are working in that
company
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. On another hand,there are
also
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 some demerits of establishing a self office.
Initially
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,
to set
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 up
a
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an
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 own business requires
a
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apply
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income and leadership skills.
for example
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,
the
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 financial matter plays an important role to start a
company
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,so without leadership skills and income
people
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 can not start their own business,
then
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 it will result in spoiling their life.
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,another disadvantage is that responsibility can be increased.
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,
people
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 who
starts
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 their own firms are the only
responsible
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ones responsible
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 for that
company
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. To conclude,
self employed
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 brings more advantages for all
people
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 in terms of enough
time
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 and
good
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a good
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 salary.
Although
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this
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 trend,there are
also
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 some demerits
such
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 as responsibility and leadership skills.
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