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Firstly, the eggs are laid in reeds and small stones in the upper river, where water flows slowly, and remain there for about 5 to 6 months. After hetching, the fish comes out and grows in size to approximately 3 to 8 cm.

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The given pie charts provide information about the
consumption
 of
energy
 as well as the
emission
 of
greenhouse
 gases as a byproduct
off
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this
energy
 in different segments of an average Australian house. Overall, heating and water heating accounts for the highest
consumption
 of
energy
, which is 3/4th of the total usage, while the rest of the segments only uses the remaining 1/4th portion.
However
, In terms of
greenhouse
gas
 emissions, those remaining segments produce 1/2nd proportion of the total gases emitted, which was double as
compares
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 to their
energy
cunsumption
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consumption
. Heating and water heating are the maximum
energy consuming
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energy-consuming
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 processes in an Australian household with the usage of 42% and 32% of
energy
 respectively. Interestingly, the
ratio
 of the
greenhouse
 gases emitted during water heating is almost similar to its
energy
 utilization
ratio
, whereas the
greenhouse
gas
emission
 in
heating
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the heating
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 process is three times less as compared to its
energy
consumption
.
Furthermore
, the
energy
 consumed by the rest of the processes is less than 25% of the total
energy
consumption
.
However
, their
gas
emission
 is doubled
that
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 is more than 50% of the total
emission
. The
ratio
 of
energy
 consumed in refrigeration, other appliances, lightning and cooling is 7%, 15%, 4% and 2% respectively, whereas, the
ratio
 of
greenhouse
gas
emission
 is almost doubled in every process which is 14% and 28% by
refrigertor
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refrigerator
 and other appliances and 8% and 3% by lightning and cooling system respectively.
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