Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas, now many suffer loneliness and health problems. What are the cause for this and what are some solutions?

Music
is probably one thing that could merge
people
in various cultures and generations together. From my point of view, I strongly agree with
this
statement and I will give reasons in the essay below. Regarding the
first
, there is no boundary for
music
, simply because,
music
or performing all over the world show a big range of
music
styles which rely on culture, location or language.
However
,
everyone
is able to enjoy the beauty of
music
from melody, rhythm without language knowledge.
For example
, I and my friends love listening to Japanese
song
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from manga, a
cartoon
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in Japanese style, even we do not understand the meaning but we are still happy and dance while listening to the
song
which impacts our feeling. 

According to
this
idea, another best example is
everyone
sing
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the ‘Happy Birthday’
song
in birthday before blowing the candle. Even though
people
from different countries do not speak only
in
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English but
this
song
brings
everyone
to celebrate a birthday party. Another reason I hold
this
view,
music
is similar to fashion. Some
one-hit wonder
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songs are still on
air
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in
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radio
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or
internet
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,
also
launches in remastered or covered versions.
People
in different generations enjoy the same
song
in
the
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different periods of time.
For instance
, The Beatles, an English rock band which popular in
’70s
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, I am happy to
listen
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their whole album all day and sing along with my parents, as they are a big
fan
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of The Beatles when they are a teenager. In conclusion, I definitely believe that the variety of
music
is valuable for
everyone
, no matter where there are in the corner of the world or which age they are, young, mature or elder. The majority of
people
understand and enjoy
music
which is a universal interesting art piece from their experience.
Music
connects
people
together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Happiness
  • Health
  • Exercise
  • Spending time
  • Loneliness
  • Health problems
  • Causes
  • Solutions
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  • Priorities
  • Social interaction
  • Physical activity
  • Advancements in technology
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  • Opportunities
  • Awareness
  • Family
  • Community
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