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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that products of the
food
 and the drink have a high level of
sugars
 which causes a lot of disadvantages so high
sugar
 products should be more expensive than less
sugar
 for the customer will select the less
sugar
product
. In my humble opinion, I completely agree with
this
 topic because if the
product
 of low
sugar
 has a
price
point
 lower
then
 the
product
 has high
sugar
. The customer will select the low
sugar
product
 rather than high
sugar
product
 and consumers do not have a choice of the
food
 or the drink so companies can decrease
sugars
 on it for the health of populations. Nowadays, the
product
 with less
sugar
 has a
price
point
 higher than the
product
 which has high
sugars
.
Thus
, the companies must adjust the
price
.
For instance
, Thailand has a lot of healthy
food
 and drink which are non-
sugar
 and low calories but the
price
point
 a quite high
such
 as
food
 healthy which have an average
price
 of about 150 - 200 bath or the fruits which non-
sugar
 or organic which has the
price
point
 average 100 - 150 bath.
However
, most people would like to select the low
sugar
product
 but the
price
point
 is high so they choose the
price
 which is low and exercise rather than buy the non-
sugar
product
 which the
price
 high.
Furthermore
, consume of the people depense on the
product
 from manufacturers because they can not control it without their owner. A good case in
this
point
 , the restaurant of employment in Central company have a policy which decreases
sugars
 in the
food
 and concern the health problem of the employee. In conclusion, I really agree with the
company
Change noun form
company's
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 need to adjust the
price
 of low
sugar
 has declined and increased the
price
 of the
product
 of high
sugar
.
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