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It is not necessary for people to travel to another places to learn about culture. We can learn as much from books, films, and the Internet. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that it is not vital to go and live in other countries to learn their culture and behaviour. They believe that there are some other resources
such
 as movies,
books
 and the
Internet
 which can help us
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understand
the
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other cultures. I wholeheartedly agree with
this
 idea and in
this
 essay, I will explain the reasons.
To begin
 with, by improving technology and the
world wide web
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, people around the world can search for any topic and learn information through the
Internet
. Because there are various websites and programs which have so much information about
cultures
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 and history of a nation.
In addition
, by improving social media in the
last
 decades, there is
this
 possible and beneficial way for us to make friends from other societies and speak with them about their lives.
Hence
, the
Internet
 and online
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applications
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 provide a situation for us to read or watch everything related to the culture of
the
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other nations without travelling to that country. Even we can find all the
books
 in different search engines like
google
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 or
firefox
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.
For example
, On the Amazon website, it is possible to search for
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 name of a country, and it brings up thousands of
books
 which we can with a small fee buy and read them.
Secondly
, travelling to different lands is extremely expensive and in some situations it is unfeasible.
Due to
 the fact that there are some diplomatic problems or some strict rules about entering some countries, travelling is
also
 impracticable.
Therefore
, using online programs or films is a remedy.
For instance
, there is a limitation for entering Balkh Island that does not let foreigners from other countries come and watch their religious ceremony.
Then
, we can watch it online. In conclusion, the
Internet
 has been alleviated
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 recent years. And in my view, with online applications and
books
, folks are able to get all the information and learn almost everything about the cultures.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experiences
  • diverse perspectives
  • comprehensive
  • historical context
  • facilitates
  • sensory and emotional depth
  • holistic understanding
  • cultural bias
  • stereotypes
  • discernment
  • virtual reality
  • convenience of access
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