Some people believe that eventually jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, technology evaluation is beyond more than in the past. Many people try to create a new technology innovation
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support and satisfy
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need. Some people believe that artificially intelligent
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will be replaced eventually jobs in the future. From my point of view, I agree with
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many reasons, described in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached. 63
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of all, they will pay less cost than hiring many
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. As we know, many businesses try to reduce
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in the present. They want to save their cost for gaining more profit as much as they can, so they find the way to achieve that business objective which is artificially intelligent
robots
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are the answer for them. They think that They do not pay salaries to the
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as they pay to the
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every month. They just pay
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time to purchase and pay for maintenance
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every 5 to 10 years later, which is safer than hiring
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is one of the new
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for satisfying
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need same as
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, but
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it is better than
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, they can calculate a complex task accurately and faster than
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, so
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do not waste their time
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,
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can suggest accurately details or instructions to
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that sellers forgot to inform their
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sometime
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,
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program inside the robot is the perfect function for helping
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. Many
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try to create and update a new program
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more
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to provide
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satisfaction in the future. Some function
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cannot do as the technology
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security function, in the past we used a key to lock the door, after
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we used our
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finger print
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the eyes. 71 In conclusion, it is obvious that artificially intelligent
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have many
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beneficial
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satisfaction as we can see in the paragraphs above.
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, It will be replaced eventually jobs in the future certainly. 35
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • automation
  • robotics
  • futuristic developments
  • analyze data
  • analytical precision
  • human capabilities
  • emotional intelligence
  • human interaction
  • human oversight
  • strategic decision-making
  • nuances of human judgment
  • technological landscape
  • intrinsic human qualities
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