You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. More and more people are buying food that is ready to eat rather than choosing to eat home-cooked food. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
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modern scenario,many individuals are consuming outside nourishment which involved less work rather than
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is due to they do not have enough
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to get prepare bread at residence as their busy schedules.
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essay will discuss both merits and demerits
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this
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phenomenon. To embark on,these days,the advancement in technology has made
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life easier compared to the past.
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,the public is ordering nourishment just sit a home through the internet using some delivery apps
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will result in saving
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especially
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it is beneficial for employees.
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,employees do not get much
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to cook
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at their homes,
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at that
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,these apps will
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them to order bread
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they want.
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,As a matter of fact,the taste of
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is very delicious compared to home-made
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. On another hand,consuming bread outside has a tremendous negative influence on the public.
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,junk
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is comprised
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a lot of fats and carbs.
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,it might
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on
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our health issues
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as
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obesity as well as
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heart diseases.
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,according to the world health organisation,the main reason for getting fat is consuming a lot of
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which is available
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restaurants because it contains high cholesterol levels.
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,it involves
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a higher prices
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compared to home-made nourishment as they include all charges like GST and service fee.
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,if people want to consume outside they should walk or commute to another place where they want to eat. To conclude,every coin has both sides.
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phenomenon has advantages,there are
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some demerits,but the cons are higher
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that
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the prons which are
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time consuming
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and delicious
food
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,the cons are unhealthy,expensive and commute to other places.
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