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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. More and more people are buying food that is ready to eat rather than choosing to eat home-cooked food. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern scenario,many individuals are consuming outside nourishment which involved less work rather than
home-made
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item
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.
This
 is due to they do not have enough
time
 to get prepare bread at residence as their busy schedules.
This
 essay will discuss both merits and demerits
to
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this
 phenomenon. To embark on,these days,the advancement in technology has made
people
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 life easier compared to the past.
Firstly
,the public is ordering nourishment just sit a home through the internet using some delivery apps
such
 as Zomato and Swiggy.
Consequently
,
this
 will result in saving
time
especially
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 it is beneficial for employees.
For instance
,employees do not get much
time
 to cook
food
 at their homes,
therefore
 at that
time
,these apps will
helps
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 them to order bread
what
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 they want.
secondly
,As a matter of fact,the taste of
food
 is very delicious compared to home-made
food
. On another hand,consuming bread outside has a tremendous negative influence on the public.
Initially
,junk
food
 is comprised
with
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 a lot of fats and carbs.
As a result
,it might
effects
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on
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our health issues
such
 as
the
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obesity as well as
the
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heart diseases.
For example
,according to the world health organisation,the main reason for getting fat is consuming a lot of
food
 which is available
on
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the
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restaurants because it contains high cholesterol levels.
Moreover
,it involves
with
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a higher prices
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 compared to home-made nourishment as they include all charges like GST and service fee.
Furthermore
,if people want to consume outside they should walk or commute to another place where they want to eat. To conclude,every coin has both sides.
Although
this
 phenomenon has advantages,there are
also
 some demerits,but the cons are higher
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that
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than
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 the prons which are
time consuming
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 and delicious
food
.
In contrast
,the cons are unhealthy,expensive and commute to other places.
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