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A growing number of people work by telecommuting, that is, the employees works from home, using a computer and the internet to connect with the office. what are the advantages and disadvantages of working this way?

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Nowadays, due to growth in technology employees works from
place
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, using a computer and the internet to connect with the office. There are many pros and cons to
this
 topic. On the
first
 hand, working from
home
 can reduce physical
stress
 and air pollution.
Firstly
, completing
work
 assignments from
home
 can reduce physical
stress
 and avoid contact with other persons.
This
 can be very beneficial.
For instance
, a person working in a software company like 'Airtel' and 'Idea' needs to travel 10 kilometres for
work
, for travelling they use personal transport. But, after the development of technology, workers started attending company calls and
work
from
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online.
This
 is a benefit.
Secondly
,
stress
 can be reduced by working online.
This
 can be useful to workers in many ways.
For example
, a worker working in a multinational company needs to
work
 more than 15 hours a day. If he worked in the office without rest, he might be affected by
stress
. Whereas, working from
home
 can be an advantage to
this
 kind of workers as they can rest at the
home
.
This
 can reduce physical and mental
stress
.
On the other hand
, many businesses started their service on the internet by selling their products and promoting them on other social media applications like Instagram, Facebook and Snapchat. Nowadays,
this
 kind of application is complicated. These apps are more easily hacked by trained coders. To illustrate, a common person buying, a dining table from a half-developed website might cause trouble to his or her bank balance. All in all, using the internet as the working platform is a better way than an in-person office ,
however
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 the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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