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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of renting homes

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Over recent years, many people consider that buying a house is an interesting investment in your life after hard
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, others are opposed to
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 statement, they believe that renting provides more benefits. There is a strong argument about
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, owning a property would be a big reward for yourself to buy for your own within the budget.
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 of paying monthly rental fees, you would rather spend an instalment of your own house.
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, the investment in these days can become to your family’s in the future.
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, everyone has the ability to construct and decorate the place in their favourite style without prior notice to the landlord.
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, purchasing a house is the way to fulfil your needs and your family. Turning to the other view, renting accommodation is more common,
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 with, the economic value of property price in each country, some cities are in very high rate which unaffordable for many people who in the middle class or lower.
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, the variety of living cultures is another issue to support.
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, working culture in Japan normally relocates people to
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 in different locations every 5 years.
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, Japanese employees prefer to rent their place which more convenient to go to
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 every day and easy to move to another place nearby the other
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 location. In conclusion, there has both pros and cons of accommodation purchasing, the positive point is to get a reward and be able to be your own asset for a lifelong
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 you do not hesitate whatever you want to do for your real estate. Meanwhile, renting accommodation is another good option for a long stay. From my point of view, I strongly believe that everyone could recognize what is suit their best life the most, simply because the different situation has occurred in each life.
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